Mount Union blog post

The University of Mount Union has a student blog section. The blog post I am critiquing is “The Haunted House on the Hill.”

The writer doesn’t open with her own opinion. She gets straight to the point. This is good in her case because the purpose of this blog is to serve as a news source for the university.

I think that she should shorten her paragraphs to give the reader a break. Shortening the paragraphs would also allow more stimulation for the reader’s eyes.

Do you agree?

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